Writing DLO

Hi everyone, welcome back to my blog. For this blog, I'm going to be talking about my writing DLO. This task is about show not tell, I worked with my friend for this task. We got given four boring sentences each and we had to make them interesting with show not tell, here is my DLO.

He’s nervous about his job interview

He was biting his crusty nails,  pacing up and down the hallway dripping in sweat.

I walked through the forest. It was already Fall and I was getting cold. 

I could hear the frosty leaves crunching underneath my muddy shoes, my fingers had started to slowly change blue and my teeth chattered  together as my jaw shook from the cold. 

Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.

He was shivering with fear inside his blanket with a scared impression on his face.

The pizza was delicious.

Mereana - I was drooling just looking at the pizza in front of me and  when I bit into it I felt like I was floating.

 Grace - The greasy cheese slipped off the crunchy pizza base and slipped onto my fluffy wool  jumper. 

She was so sad when she lost her puppy.

She kept on thinking about how warm and soft she was when they cuddled and the sound of her bark, it felt like she had just lost her best friend. 

It was a stormy night.

The rain was pouring down, the thunder was as loud as a rock band and the lightning was crashing like two cars colliding.

It was an exciting day.

I was overwhelmed with happiness, I couldn’t help but my cheeks hurt from smiling. 

I dropped my ice cream in the dirt.

I look down at my dripping ice cream covered in dirt slowly melting and sinking away.

 

Thanks for looking at my blog, let me know if you use show not tell. Bye.